1) An image or description that lends finality to the essay
As the sun went down, the darkness led me to my room. The darkness was as black as night, representing an exhaustion known only to those who had witnessed the days event of the seven deadly sins. Trudging along I opened the door to my room, the door creaking so loud anyone who was in the hall may have jumped with fright. I closed the door with a slam, unaware I had done it with so much force I jumped out of my socks. My bed was made up perfectly, no crease in the sheets, and even the pillow. I put on my superman pajamas and as I took a deep sigh I began to wrinkle the sheets as I pulled them back, and quickly I fell asleep for tommorow begins a new day.
2) You can end with a relevant quotation
"But It's the only life we'll know, Blagards to the bone. So don't wreck yourself take an honest grip, for there's more tales beyond the shore." Flogging Molly sings to me as I fall asleep, ironically the songs called the seven deadly sins but I ponder no more just wait for an endless dream.
Hi Clara,
ReplyDeleteIntroduce each of these so that we know why they are there. You might also copy and paste in your original so that we can see the difference between your early attempt and your later ones.
Ms. Basko